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Fangala the Flying Feline

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: No solid title yet... Please give a title suggestion

    Hi! It's my absolute pleasure to help you get published, so here we go: First, congratulations. It's difficult to tweak your reader's heartstrings in the first chapter, before we even ...

    May 30, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: An Absence of Rose

    Oh. My. God. This is possibly the most darkly beautiful thing I have ever read on this site. You had me hooked from the first sentence and you didn't let ...

    May 28, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Angalcia: PROLOGUE

    Great writing! It makes me curious what fantastical things are about to happen. And now, jumping straight into the critique: The sound of a buzzing alarm intruded on Alexia’s dream. ...

    May 27, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: MAGIC. chapter two

    I can't believe no one's commented on this yet! I have absolutely nothing bad to say. The voice is so clear, the characterization so succinct--you've really nailed it. I adore ...

    May 12, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Wake Up, You're Dead

    Ha! First to review! But hopefully not the first to be stunned. I mean, WOW. What a brilliant topic and execution. At first I thought this was yet another vampire ...

    Apr 27, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Demon Street (0)

    Yikes! What's with the bad reviews? I for one think this is really good. It's not tired and worn-out at all; it has a nice satirical ring, that's all. Very ...

    Apr 27, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Caught (1)

    First of all, thanks for saying that Chessie is the opposite of Bella. That was medicine for my soul. Now, onto your story: Excellent! You have a real talent for ...

    Apr 25, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: I Saw the Red

    Hi! Remember me? Your writing just keeps getting better and better. This piece is amazing. It pulled me along at breakneck speed, so when I reached the end it was ...

    Apr 24, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Music of my Soul

    Another nice poem. You have a talent for setting up mood and atmosphere in a small amount of words. You also have lots of good subtle rhyme in here, like ...

    Dec 24, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Light of my Heart

    Beautiful! In all my time on this site, I've never seen a poem with a picture, so congrats on originality! On to the crit: And electromagnetism Hisses vengefully As pines ...

    Dec 24, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Being Turned

    Wow! Just when I thought vampires had become unbearably cliche, you pulled through and showed me something new. It's hilarious how the turning ceremony has a red carpet and everything, ...

    Dec 23, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Dark Star ch.1

    Yes, a cat story! Love those. Good first sentence--very gripping. It pulled me in right away. The mouse chewed on, unaware of his presence Awkward sentence. I understand what you're ...

    Dec 23, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Scavenger (1)

    OH MY GOD! This is gorgeous! Without a doubt the BEST thing I have read for a LONG time. Your dialogue is flawlessly realistic and funny. Especially this: Druth made ...

    Dec 20, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Blue Ice fire

    Short indeed, but hey, intriguing nonetheless. Especially when you say "two different races". Since this is in the fantasy section, I'm thinking more like different species, but I guess I'll ...

    Dec 17, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: All Babies Are Blessings (10)

    Fabulous! marched over to the buffet style table, like I was walking a runway rather than in a shelter, hearing the satisfying click of my shoes, and the whispers of ...

    Dec 10, 2008


As if you were on fire from within. The moon lives in the lining of your skin.
— Pablo Neruda